Find someone you trust to help you with how to lay out your paragraphs, and the prospective view of ”him, her, their, ours, we, etc. I’d really hate to see this story end before it had a chance to be a really good story. Anime I really do like the concept of this story. I’d really hate to see this story end before it had a chance to be a really good story. I really do like the concept of this story. I go along with all the other people that are not happy with your grammar. I’ve got no complaints on the story line by itself. I really do like the concept of this story. IF ONLY it were laid out differently. Seriously the only reason it’s gettin’ such low rating marks, is it’s so totally screwed up grammar wise.anonymous readerReport 2011-11-15 10:05:28Your writing sucks. Knowing when to put in quotes and how make the reader know for sure who’s sayin’ what. I really do like the concept of this story.
