gender, and make the scenes longer do that and the stories will be brilliantanonymous readerReport 2012-01-07 22:02:12I loved how you added the end«12» but good storyanonymous readerReport 2013-01-05 16:43:39i enjoyed as a begginers peice but to improve go in to more detail, describe the character e.g. gender, and make the scenes longer do that and the stories will be brilliantanonymous readerReport 2012-01-07 22:02:12I loved how you added the end«12» but good storyanonymous readerReport 2013-01-05 16:43:39i enjoyed as a begginers peice but to improve go in to more detail, describe the character e.g. Cartoon sex but good storyanonymous readerReport 2013-01-05 16:43:39i enjoyed as a begginers peice but to improve go in to more detail, describe the character e.g. 8 comments«12»Anonymous readerReport 2014-03-10 10:20:47Instead of just telling right away what they did in the end you could have made sequels to the storyAnonymous readerReport 2014-03-10 10:17:34Main story was good but you rushed in the end that screwed up the story.
